moremagic
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# Posted: 18 Sep 2006 09:28
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Hi there Dale,
Nice to see that people can get so enthousiastic about their work that they even write a song about it, talking about dedication.
I just visited both sites mentioned above and the first thing I noticed is that you have taken the blue background. This normally is something which goes well with a sales- or squeeze page but in your case you keep the rest of the sqeeuze page very timide. I am not to sure if the blue doesn't distract to much from your message.
Next you might perhaps center your headline and hightlight just the part "Achieve Any Dream You've Ever Wanted" for more dramatical effect.
The bullet points which you mention might bring in more effect if you write them in bold and place them in the center as well.
As for your subscription form, try to use the same font type as the rest of your letter and make sure the boxes are aligned properly, this will give a more professional impression.
A good way to put some more emphasis on the benefits of your song might be writing a few points in bold. for example: "Absolutely Free"
Looking at your /news page, there are two things which I would change.
I would prefer to make it a two column instead of three for easier reading and, you might want to put your mission statement in a bolder font on the top of your page instead of at the top left as you do now. A visitor to your web site needs to be enticed immediately to stay interested. Perhaps tracking the amount of time your visitors will stay might give you some interesting reading.
Anyway, just telling you my first impressions, hope it will give you some food for thoughts.
Harrold.
PS: your song is still playing in the background. Cool!!
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